Run!

The sweat poured over his eyes, the band on his head soaked from waiting days in intolerable heat and humidity.

He glanced at his spotter and the O.I.C. of this op. Once more he glanced through the scope, there he was, all pressed and clean,

He figured 700 yards, not out of his best shot by far. He took a deep breath, let it out slowly and caressed the trigger, he rolled with the shot, bringing the scope down to see where his target was hit, then the world exploded! They must have been spotted themselves, quickly they packed up and started to run. Cambodia was not supposed to be part of this war, but he went where he was told, 80 miles to the Vietnam border, run!

Run! the three men although unequal in rank, were now united in one thing and one thing only.. run! Hours passed and they could still hear the troops on there tail, too many to fight, there was only one thing to do, run! Hours passed, breath coming in short gasps, run! Life turned into the pounding of his feet against the earth, run was all he could think, soon his weapon grew to heavy, he smirked at the officer and tossed his prize 1903 Springfield, run.. Early daylight turned into night, no stopping, watering themselves at full tilt. run.. Legs started to turn into lead weights and still they ran, the sound of pursuit grew fainter, but that gave no comfort to them, it could be the V.C. on their tails now and they were silent as the mist, run...

Night turned into daybreak and on they ran.. run!.. life had turned into a self imposed torture, run.. The miles became endless.. how many have they already run? how many to go till safety?.. run! Now the third day was approaching, they must be close, run!!

Lungs heaving, back breaking, fear induced, run... Muscles crying from the build up of lactic acid and not enough water.... run!

Over the last hill through a rice paddy, smiling faces, brothers faces, they were saved, no need to run anymore!
118 Miles they figured they ran, collapsing to the moist ground, falling instantly asleep, dreaming of ...,run!
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Reply By: ShovelheatPosted: Tuesday, May 02, 2006Too cool...felt like I was THERE! That one's a keeper, MM...


wow thanx joe, I am trying to write more about other stuff besides politics.
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I am trying to write more about other stuff besides politics.


you have my undying support!
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Great read Elie...Thank youi !!!
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#3 by Shovelheat
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


you have my undying support!


as you have mine.
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#4 by Gimpyone
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


Great read Elie...Thank youi !!!


awwwwww michele, thank you love, hey! 23 days till you are here.. yayyyyy hooooooooo
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You got to write more!  This is like being given a taste of caviar and then told that is all!

YOu do write very well!

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#7 by Dr. Guy
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


You got to write more! This is like being given a taste of caviar and then told that is all!
YOu do write very well!


thank you doc, I hope to improve my feeble skills and turn into 1/2 the writer of the fazz or buddah or dylan.
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I liked the urgency of this writing. well done.
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#9 by Buddha Moskowitz
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


liked the urgency of this writing. well done.


for some reason the word urgency as goes with this article escapes me. Could you elucidate?
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I felt like I was running alongside... there was no distance between the author and this reader -urgent, not removed...
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#11 by Buddah Moskowitz
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


felt like I was running alongside... there was no distance between the author and this reader -urgent, not removed...


ohhhh now I understand.. thanx.
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Very good job MM.

Really enjoyed this one.

Now I have to RUN!

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#13 by Tova7
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


Very good job MM.
Really enjoyed this one.
Now I have to RUN!


cute... run run fast as you can...
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This piece has a great rhythm and cadence. Great for reading out loud.
Take this one to an open mic night!
Maggie
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Reply By: Ms. MitchellPosted: Tuesday, May 02, 2006This piece has a great rhythm and cadence. Great for reading out loud.Take this one to an open mic night! Maggie


naw me mug is wayyyyyyyy to oooogly to try and read something in public, besides I am shy.
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17 by little-whip
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


Wow, Elie!

You really have to keep at this, your talent for creative writing seems like a seed ready to burst forth, I can't wait to see it in full bloom!

Enjoyed it immensely, i really did.


you already know what I think about your writing skills.

This means alot to me sabrina.

elie
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Reply By: spindoctor(Anonymous User)Posted: Tuesday, May 02, 2006This made my heart race, I could feel the fear. Well written.Bonus Rating: Trolling Insightful


darn it get a screen name. but thank you